OK, I didn't read all of that, but I'd just like to comment on two things.
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He looked human except for his crimson hair and maroon eyes.
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I make no claims to being anywhere near ready to getting anything published, but seriously...I wrote like that when I was twelve. It's just not good writing. It's half-baked, and the kind of thing you read when people are describing their own characters in those online roleplay threads.
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They resembled men with bowed legs and thick, brutish arms made for crushing.
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I take it the Urgals are orc-like creatures? You know, what with being described as almost
exactly the same as they were in LOTR? I remember this description distinctly. This isn't just a stolen plot. I really don't see how this isn't outright plagiarism. This is just one example in an entire trilogy, true, but still much too close to Tolkien's
exact words for comfort.